give a little chuckle
squint as you go..
out in the sunny day
nonchalant..
lost on the track of time
carried by the wind
sit under the shade
the breeze plays around
with a few loose locks
that dance about your face
occupied...
the music
fades in
fades out.
floating in a vacuum
with gravity beneath
chained...
the twists and turns
not of life or fate
but of death and dreams.
your hands are your claws
right on your throat..
on the verge of something
surely not insanity..
19 comments:
YAY KUCH LIKH LIYA. =D
*sniff* *wipes tears*
the twists and turns
not of life or fate
but of death and dreams.
your hands are your claws
right on your throat..
on the verge of something
surely not insanity..
I dunno. Hehe.
wow it compliments the abstraction of the painting :)
well done girl!
i love abstraction!
I couldn't related to this poem, to be honest, but I loved the way you expressed yourself. And you've chosen just the right painting to go with it :)
lol, beaugly :p whatever you meant, thanks :D
desi, hehe ya thats the only thing this piece is doing, going well with the painting..i wish i could paint like that...
purple, i am not sure if i can relate to it either :/
Amazing!
I really want to get crackin on some poetry, I'm going to blame assignments for now.
:/
Stay blogging, don't disappear!
The good thing about abstract stuff is that anyone can relate to it, but the bad thing is that not everyone can relate to it, but sometimes noone can relate to it, but thats how its meant to be.
this is incredibly remarkable! the way it has been expressed is like woah.. and the painting is really in sync with the poetry..
loved it =]
rainy, thanks girl. ya wont disappear :D
mha, lol what?
ayla, thanks
sorry i wrote it when i was half sleeping, so it an abstract comment as well...lol
I wish to have your worthy opinion on this article, as muddle as I am.
http://umertoor.blogspot.com/2009/02/is-golablization-inevitable.html
I'll be blessed if...
the twists and turns
not of life or fate
but of death and dreams.
ufffffffffff !! awesome !!
abstract art is all lost on me so no comments
very thoughtful words in simplistic words...you rock !
mha, haw how bad :(
umer, sure why not :)
ubee, lol thanks :p
lost, hmpf!
daanish.. tx :)
Thanks.
I loved reading it but...All right I think the lines "the twists and turns
not of life or fate
but of death and dreams" are just not right...considering the rest of it is so well written.
Now call me a scrooge for finding faut with it ... but that's what I think.
I mean "twists & turns" of "death" ? or of "dreams"? The expression is somehow weak ....... or would you please explain ?
CAV, o didnt see your comment earlier.. and i m really glad someone pointed that out.. it is indeed weak in terms of how poetry is composed..every line has to be balanced to compliment the preceding and the proceeding...and thats exactly why its not making sense..it doesnt.i know. however, we can justify anything, cant we? so lets see how i do that now :p
everyone knows how life and fate puts us in unpredictable situations but dreams and death cant do that...after death there are no twists and turns and as for dreams...well they could twist and turn us..so i guess theres some element of irony that i might have been trying to put, unconsciously, that is to say. the irony that i m telling my readers to believe in something that we hardly think of..how many times do we take death seriously? most of us are just too consumed and indulged in our material life..we dont give a second thought to death or life after it...not everyone does.. or it could be an indication in terms of contradiction to something else.. contradiction to my entire poem in the sense that i started off with the word nonchalant then it came down to more serious verbs occupied and chained..from little everyday things we do like crack our knuckles and playing with our hair i traveled, rather fast, to chained..how we are chained to life? to death? to our dreams? hmm maybe something i am still trying to figure out...myself..
hehehe, so how do u like my justification...something on the lines of absurd? well i honestly enjoyed dissecting my own poem :D which i hardly ever do ;p
looking forward to a reply of yours :)
You are very smart, I must say !
I got the point... :)
Keep writing.
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